I have received my feedback from my tutor and was overall very happy with the positive and constructive comments I received. I had chosen my close reading on a poem that I had no idea was described by many as one of the most, if not the most important modernist poem of the twentieth century. Once I had discovered this, I still continued with the close reading. It was therefore really encouraging to read my tutor’s opening comments that is was “bold move” to do the close reading on the opening section of T.S. Eliot’s Wasteland. He also mentioned that I had “got to grips with some close reading methodology and stylistics of literature and applied them well to this poem”. It made me feel so good about what I had achieved and that I was actually understanding what I was studying. One thing I noticeably forgot to do was add the actual part of the poem I was doing the close reading on ‘The Burial of the Dead’. So note to myself is to make sure I follow the instructions to a T. I will now add some of the comments below and add my own thoughts and reflections to them
I have made extensive notes in the documents you sent which include much improved referencing and organization. This was very encouraging as I had mentioned to my tutor in my previous assignment that the referencing side of things concerned me, I felt that I had made improvement and this was confirmed.
Avoid too much speculation and support your ‘opinion with some references, citing reliable sources. I realize that I can’t just use a random student on the internet or an unknown source, needs to be a more convincing and reliable quote.
Define in more detail some of the key concepts and themes that apply to the work – modernism and its ‘programme’ to disrupt formal devices in literature, art, photography etc is key here as is a foregrounding of form before you begin to describe the subject matter of the work. I need to make sure I do this in future.
Do include the text in the essay to refer to and do back up some of your general. Noted I will make sure I add to my assignment.
In academic writing also, writing in the third person and considering the form of the work and showing that you understand the theme/discourse is all you need to do for a degree level. Supplement the detailed description of literary elements with analysis which will move to a more persuasive writing style as you progress. Not sure I quite understood the meaning of this, but hopefully I will as my studying progresses.
Define key terms that refer and are essential to this work ie if Modernism as a key ‘disruptive’ form is central to this poem (it is), then define it in both form & content int he opening of the essay and in your reflection. This is context. Use references (such as Lodge in – Readings). Makes sense to do this so again will make a mental note to define key terms more. Look more into the word and movement of Modernism
Some research on ‘intertextuality’ its definitions and application in art and literature would support the reading on Elliot. See Lodge in Readings. I will follow up on these additional reading suggestions – especial in Readings.
COMMENTS MADE ON MY ACTUAL CLOSE READING
Personally, I would avoid your opinion and try to engage with the stylistics/linguistics of the poem and uncover how it communicats (this will be useful to consider as you move onto other mediums in later assignments). I will look at the additional reading list in order to understand the ‘stylistics/linguistics of a poem.
Get to grips with variations in Harvard referencing so as Shrestha (2013) comments … in this case (Author, date) in brackets works better. Need to read and re read the Harvard referencing information to better understand so that it becomes second nature.
Avoid speculation, and outline the formal way the poem shows this mood. I had used ‘I can only imagine’, so I will take note not to use this type of message.
Use references (such as Eliot) to allued to a real, historical figure such as Marie Louise Elizabeth Mendel also the cousin of Archduke Rudolph, the Crown Prince. Strangely enough I was going to reference further but wasn’t sure at the time, so will make note for the future.
Introduce this theme of time signature in the introduction with some references see Joyce and David Lodge ‘intertextuality’ in Readings. Further studying required in the additional reading list.
Qualify some of the passages in this reflection. So, say what these skills are specifically. I had mentioned poems that I had never thought of looking at before, so I need to mention which ones they are.
Reference this. Is it in the learning log? then link reference here. I had made up a small poem as suggested in one of the exercises and mentioned it in my reflection. My tutor is suggesting I reference it here. I’ve made a note to include it.
Could you give a reference to a text that summarises this? Dean and Miller? I had said that I was realizing that Time and Place was very significant in all aspects of art, but I didn’t give any examples. I will investigate what makes me realize this and make some quotes.
Define this in the intro to the essay. Modernist was the word I used and I now realize with all the feedback that I need to apply this in the introduction of any essay.
It’s productive. You can apply similar stylistic readings when it comes to visual communication and photography. In my closing paragraph I said that this whole learning experience in part 2 Creative Reading will ‘help me through the next stages of this course’. It would appear I will be using the same tools even in visual communication and photography, am really looking forward to it.
It was good to go through my feedback again and highlight some of the main comments I received, in summary it looks like I’m doing ok and the main thing is I am learning so much and keep gaining more confidence as each Project is completed. Creative Reading is different to what I was expecting, I had thought it would have been more about my own creative writing style, it has therefore been such a huge learning curve. It has made me discover a much deeper understanding for what makes an exciting fiction book or poem. I can see that there is a lot to learn and considering this is one of the routes I want to take it has made me think a little more about which two routes I would like to follow, as I had thoroughly enjoyed Contemporary Art, it was much more visual, however Creative Writing is where my passion lies. I am looking forward to my next learning experience of Visual Communications, I am finding the way the course is structured is just so clever, how it makes you research and learn, I am really enjoying the whole learning experience.